投诉超市湿滑地面致跌倒Complaint about slipping on wet supermarket floor
AI 估评 8 分查看四维评分详情
四个维度等权计分,均值 8,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。
任务完成度 TA8 / 9
身份、事故经过和预防建议清楚,具体地点时间便于调查;仅说受伤,缺少伤势或事故后处理,事故展开尚可更充分。
档位依据:8档覆盖充分;9档可补足具体受伤后果。
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last Thursday morning at your South Street branch, at around 9:30am
事故时地具体。
I was injured in your supermarket
伤害仅作概述。
改进建议
- 简要交代伤势或店员当时如何协助。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
事故概述、经过、预防和身份信息安排清楚,For reference适当补充联系记录;开头和措施段重复避免再发生。
档位依据:8档易读且组织良好;9档可精简重复目的。
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The accident occurred last Thursday morning
自然展开背景。
For reference, my name is David Wills
补充身份清楚。
改进建议
- 把不再发生的愿望保留一处,措施段直接提出建议。
词汇资源 LR8 / 9
puddle、aisles、spillage、warning sign和protocols准确,正式投诉词汇充足;ventured into普通货架略带不必要的冒险意味。
档位依据:广泛准确资源符合8档;9档需个别选词更精确。
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there had been a spillage
事故词汇具体。
ventured into the frozen food aisle
普通购物动作的用词略夸张。
改进建议
- 用walked into直接描述进入货架区。
语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9
过去完成、被动、关系从句及目的结构准确,多数句子无误;they的指代在警示牌句略可更明确。
档位依据:8档复杂结构准确成立;9档需更严密的代词安排。
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a puddle that had been left in one of your aisles
关系从句与完成被动准确。
make sure that they are always visible
they主要指警示牌,但靠近equipment,指代可更明确。
改进建议
- 明确写出警示牌随时可用并放置到现场。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
作文题目
教师讨论的GT题目,具体考试日期未核实。
You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket. Write a letter to the manager of the supermarket. In your letter:
say who you are
give details about the accident
suggest how the supermarket could prevent similar accidents.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am writing to inform you that I was injured in your supermarket last week when I slipped in a puddle that had been left in one of your aisles. I would like to seek assurance from you that this will not happen again.
The accident occurred last Thursday morning at your South Street branch, at around 9:30am. I was picking up a few groceries and then ventured into the frozen food aisle. Evidently, there had been a spillage and one of your staff had mopped it up, but they had not put down a warning sign that the floor was still wet.
I understand that these things happen and I will not be pressing charges, but I do want to recommend that you put in place certain protocols to ensure that it does not happen again. Firstly, you should have staff trained to deal with these situations quickly. You should also have warning signs stored with the mopping equipment in order to make sure that they are always visible.
For reference, my name is David Wills and I am from the nearby town of Cupar. I gave my details to your staff on the day of the accident, so you should have them on file.
Sincerely,
David Wills
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