申请参加工作课程Request to attend a work course
AI 估评 9 分查看四维评分详情
四个维度等权计分,均值 8.75,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。
任务完成度 TA9 / 9
课程信息详实,工作收益由近期协调项目的经历支撑,离岗安排涵盖客户、报告和联系渠道,正式请求充分恰当。
档位依据:三项要求完整相关地展开,符合9档。
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It covers planning, budgeting and managing a team
课程内容清楚。
Daniel has kindly offered to answer any urgent questions from clients
离岗覆盖具体。
改进建议
- 继续用现有工作难点支持培训需求。
连贯与衔接 CC9 / 9
从培训信息到实际用途再到工作安排推进自然,this回指明确,时间顺序和段落作用清楚。
档位依据:阅读毫不费力,衔接与段落管理符合9档。
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Formal training would help me to do this more efficiently
回指计划期限和成本。
While I am away
直接引出离岗安排。
改进建议
- 保留当前按决策所需信息排列段落的方式。
词汇资源 LR8 / 9
budgeting、recognised、coordinating和as I go使用恰当,课程与工作词汇准确;more useful较笼统,plan deadlines搭配略生硬。
档位依据:广泛灵活资源符合8档;9档尚可提高个别表达精度。
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learn how to plan deadlines and costs as I go
as I go自然,但期限通常set或manage。
available by email each evening
联络安排简洁准确。
改进建议
- 将plan deadlines and costs具体化为set schedules and estimate costs。
语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9
间接询问、关系从句、完成进行时、时间从句和条件请求准确,结构变化充分适应内容。
档位依据:语法与标点控制充分,符合9档。
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Since March I have been coordinating the website project
时态与持续时间准确。
I would complete my weekly report before I leave
未来安排中的时间从句自然。
改进建议
- 维持时态与时间从句的准确搭配。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
作文题目
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You have been working in the same job for two years and would like to attend a training course.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter
describe the course you would like to attend
explain how it would help you in your job
say what arrangements would be needed while you are away
Dear Ms Rahman,
I am writing to ask whether I could attend a training course in project management next month.
The course is run by the City Business Institute and lasts three days, from 14 to 16 November. It covers planning, budgeting and managing a team, and it leads to a certificate that is recognised across our industry. The fee is $450.
I believe the course would make me more useful to the department. Since March I have been coordinating the website project, and I have had to learn how to plan deadlines and costs as I go. Formal training would help me to do this more efficiently and to avoid the delays we had in the summer.
While I am away, Daniel has kindly offered to answer any urgent questions from clients, and I would complete my weekly report before I leave. I would also be available by email each evening.
I would be grateful if you could let me know whether this is possible.
Yours sincerely,
Aisha Karim
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