向经理推荐工作设备Suggesting New Equipment at Work
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四个维度等权计分，均值 7.75，按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。
任务完成度 TA7 / 9
目的明确，三个要求均覆盖，健康收益和采购协助具体；设备主要只是点名，缺少结构或使用方式的描述。
档位依据：符合7档清楚覆盖；达到8档需更充分描述桌子的实际特征。
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This is a "standing desk" that I am talking about.
设备只被命名。
researching suitable models within our budget and coordinating with suppliers
采购帮助具体。
改进建议
- 补充桌面高度调节或站坐切换等实际功能。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
按推荐、用途和采购帮助顺序推进，段落清楚，因果衔接有效；久坐及长时间办公的背景有些重复。
档位依据：逻辑与衔接达到8档；9档所需的紧凑自然仍受重复背景影响。
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Given the long hours that many of us spend at our desks
引出需求。
If you find this idea worth considering
自然转向协助购买。
改进建议
- 把两次长时间办公的说明合并。
词汇资源 LR8 / 9
prolonged sitting、poor posture和blood circulation等搭配准确，办公健康词汇运用灵活；个别指称如those standing desks略显生硬。
档位依据：较广资源和准确主题词支持8档；9档还需更自然的指称与少一些泛泛措辞。
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reduce the risks associated with prolonged sitting, such as back pain and poor posture
主题词准确。
overall employee well-being, leading to higher efficiency
概括收益自然。
改进建议
- 用可调节高度等具体词汇补足设备描述。
语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9
关系从句、条件句、非谓语和因果结构准确，多数句子无误；I believe后的逗号多余。
档位依据：符合8档广泛结构且偶有非系统错误；未达到9档的稳定标点控制。
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a piece of office equipment at another office that I found exciting
关系从句结构清楚。
I believe, we could improve overall employee well-being
believe与宾语从句被多余逗号隔开。
改进建议
- 删除I believe后的逗号，或将其完整作插入语处理。
评分日期：2026-10-23 · 评分规则：IELTS 写作公开评分标准（2023 年 5 月版）
作文题目
来源页题目，与同页选定答案配套；未核为实际考试真题
You have recently learned about a piece of equipment that would help you at your workplace.
Write a letter to your manager. In your letter,
describe the equipment
explain how it might be useful at your workplace
offer help in purchasing it
Write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear …………………..,
Dear Mr Henry,
I recently came across a piece of office equipment at another office that I found exciting and believe could greatly enhance our workplace environment. This is a "standing desk" that I am talking about. Given the long hours that many of us spend at our desks, a standing desk would provide significant health and productivity benefits.
Standing desks are known to reduce the risks associated with prolonged sitting, such as back pain and poor posture. Since we work long hours in front of our computers, those standing desks could be an excellent choice. According to a journal, these desks also promote better blood circulation and boost the concentration and energy levels of employees. By incorporating these desks into our office, I believe, we could improve overall employee well-being, leading to higher efficiency.
If you find this idea worth considering, I would be happy to assist in researching suitable models within our budget and coordinating with suppliers to find the best option. Please let me know if you would like me to provide further details.
Thank you in advance.
Yours sincerely,
Amelia Martin
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