政府是否应停止艺术投入Should Governments Stop Funding the Arts?
AI 估评 7.5 分查看四维评分详情
四个维度等权计分,均值 7.5,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。
任务回应 TR7 / 9
立场清楚,两类支出理由均相关,医院、学校和穷人依赖有说明。艺术公共资助必要性主要基于机构低利润与娱乐价值,支持略概括。
档位依据:观点有扩展达到7分;为何公共预算应承担相关成本的支撑未充分达到8分。
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they are the ones more dependent on such services.
解释公共服务对贫困群体的特殊重要性。
many theatres and other such places may have to close.
提出财政必要性,但未具体说明失去机构会造成怎样的社会损失。
改进建议
- 用一项社区演出或低价观演机会说明补贴的公共收益,连接娱乐价值与政府职责。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
公共服务与艺术两段形成清晰让步关系,结论保持立场。连接与指代总体有效,少数things和such places回指泛化。
档位依据:逻辑顺畅与段落适当达到8分;少量泛指使9分无感衔接不足。
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However, this does not mean that the arts should be completely neglected.
自然承接前段公共服务重要性并限定结论。
That said, I do not believe spending money on the arts is a waste of money
清楚回扣作者部分同意的立场。
改进建议
- 把these things与such places换为具体服务或机构,增强指代精度。
词汇资源 LR7 / 9
词汇足以表达财政、福利和艺术机构,generate profit等搭配准确。things、money、quality of life反复出现,get pleasure in搭配略不自然。
档位依据:有一定灵活性达到7分;变化与搭配准确度未充分达8分。
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it is difficult for many arts institutions to generate much profit
经济语境用词恰当。
Many people get great pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances
get pleasure from更自然;music performances也可更具体。
改进建议
- 用funding、subsidies及具体服务减少money和things的重复,并修正get pleasure from。
语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9
条件、被动、强调与目的从句多样,绝大多数句子准确。个别冠词和冗长so连接使表达不够精炼。
档位依据:句式广泛、高准确度达到8分;细节控制未达9分。
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it will be the poor in our society that will be affected more if we do not spend enough
强调、被动和条件结构准确。
public services are the things such as hospitals, roads and schools
the things such as略显笨重,直接列举更自然。
改进建议
- 直接写公共服务包括哪些项目,并将连续so连接的长句适当拆分。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
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Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
These days, the government spends a large part of its budget not only on public services, but also the arts. Although I agree that it is important to spend money on public services, I do not think spending on the arts is a waste of money.
There are several reasons for spending a significant amount of the government budget on public services. First and foremost, public services are the things such as hospitals, roads and schools, and these things determine the quality of life that most of us will have. For example, if the government does not spend enough money on hospitals, the health of our society may decline. Similarly, if not enough money is spent on schools, our children may not be properly educated. Also, it will be the poor in our society that will be affected more if we do not spend enough on these things because they are the ones more dependent on such services.
However, this does not mean that the arts should be completely neglected. To begin, it is difficult for many arts institutions to generate much profit, so without some help from the government, many theatres and other such places may have to close. Moreover, the arts also have an important impact on our quality of life. Many people get great pleasure in going to see music and theatre performances so it is important that the government assists such institutions so that they can continue to provide entertainment to the public.
To sum up, there are clear benefits of ensuring a large amount of investment goes into public services as this influences the quality of life for nearly all of us. That said, I do not believe spending money on the arts is a waste of money as this too provides important benefits.
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