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年龄是否应限制就业Age should not be a barrier to people to work

Task 2 · 来源范文讨论双方并给出观点工作与经济307 词AI 估评 8.5 分
AI 估评 8.5 分查看四维评分详情

四个维度等权计分,均值 8.25,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。

任务回应 TR8 / 9

双方理由充分,个人判断提出明确能力标准,职业例子相关。年轻人技术适应力作为固定年龄理由稍概括。

档位依据:充分回应达到8分;个别支持条件不足9分。

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  • teaching, healthcare, or research

    具体支持年长者专业价值。

  • evaluating employees based on their skills, performance, and health

    清楚提出替代标准,支持作者立场。

改进建议

  • 说明如何定期评价能力,进一步回应安全与年轻人机会顾虑。

连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9

双方、个人标准和结论层次清楚,因果与例子衔接有效。末段稍重复。

档位依据:良好组织达到8分;紧凑自然程度不足9分。

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  • Conversely, proponents of allowing individuals

    清楚切换另一观点。

  • Rather than imposing age-related restrictions

    从原则推进到评价方式。

改进建议

  • 结尾以能力标准收束,减少重复经验价值。

词汇资源 LR8 / 9

tenure、institutional knowledge和workforce management自然准确;benefits have more merits冗余。

档位依据:广泛流畅资源达到8分;偶发搭配限制9分。

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  • maintain continuity in institutional knowledge.

    准确表达组织知识传承。

  • the benefits of allowing individuals to work irrespective of age seem to have more merits.

    benefits与merits意义重叠。

改进建议

  • 直接写允许继续工作的理由更有说服力,避免benefits和merits重复。

语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9

关系、让步、动名词和非谓语结构准确灵活,长句标点清楚。

档位依据:广泛结构与全篇准确符合9分。

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  • those willing and capable of working.

    省略关系从句结构准确。

  • Encouraging people to retire solely based on age overlooks

    动名词主语与单数谓语一致。

改进建议

  • 维持现有复杂主语与非谓语控制。

评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)

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Some people believe that people should be allowed to work only till a set retirement age. Others say that if people want to work, age should not be a barrier to them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In today's society, opinions diverge regarding the appropriate retirement age for workers. While some advocate for a set retirement age for everyone, others believe that individuals who wish to continue working should not be impeded by age restrictions. This essay will explore both perspectives and argue that age should not serve as a barrier to those willing and capable of working. Advocates for a set retirement age often argue that it's necessary to make way for younger workers, ensure job opportunities, and avoid hindering career advancement. They assert that limiting older employees' tenure helps refresh the workforce, allowing younger generations to access employment opportunities. For instance, in industries where technological advancements are rapid, younger employees may be perceived as more adaptable and efficient in handling modern tools and processes, thus justifying the need for a fixed retirement age. Conversely, proponents of allowing individuals to work irrespective of age highlight the advantages of diverse workplaces that include experienced individuals. Many older employees possess extensive knowledge and expertise gained through years of experience. For instance, in professions like teaching, healthcare, or research, older individuals often have invaluable skills that can greatly benefit their respective fields. Their wisdom and experience contribute to mentorship opportunities and help maintain continuity in institutional knowledge. In my opinion, age should not limit an individual's choice to work. Encouraging people to retire solely based on age overlooks their potential contributions and undervalues their capabilities. Rather than imposing age-related restrictions, evaluating employees based on their skills, performance, and health would be a more justifiable approach to workforce management. In conclusion, while there are arguments for setting a fixed retirement age, the benefits of allowing individuals to work irrespective of age seem to have more merits. Encouraging inclusivity and recognizing the value of experience in the workforce can lead to a more diversified and enriched work environment.
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