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电视节目对儿童行为的影响Television and Children’s Behaviour

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任务回应 TR7 / 9

两问均回答,暴力广告和家庭沟通有说明;同伴、教育和规范主要列举,结论新增technology未展开,部分赞同的限定稍泛。

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  • children often model their behaviour on that of their friends

    同伴机制简短。

  • family, peers, education, technology, and societal norms

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  • 选家庭和同伴两项充分说明,结论只总结已讨论因素。

连贯与衔接 CC7 / 9

电视与其他因素分组明确,However和Additionally有效;shaping behaviour重复,最后主体段从同伴跳到教育社会规范较快。

档位依据:7档清楚推进成立;8档需段内焦点更稳定。

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  • Additionally, peer influence also plays a pivotal role

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  • Education systems and societal norms also contribute significantly.

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  • 将同伴影响展开一段,减少同时列举多个因素。

词汇资源 LR8 / 9

materialistic behaviour、emotional intelligence、acceptable conduct等准确,表达流畅;facet of the multifaceted array冗余。

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  • mould their behaviour and preferences

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  • one facet of the multifaceted array

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  • 用one of several influences简洁概括。

语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9

让步、关系、分词和并列宾语从句准确,长句控制稳定,无明显系统语法问题。

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  • children raised in households where parents prioritize open communication

    分词与关系从句准确。

  • while societal norms and cultural values shape their understanding

    并列对照结构清楚。

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  • 保持复杂修饰语与主句关系清晰。

评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)

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Some people believe that what children watch on television influences their behaviour. Do you agree or disagree? In your opinion, what other factors can influence the behaviours of children? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Television remains a dominant source of entertainment and information for children, raising concerns about the impact of its content on their behaviour. While some argue that television significantly influences children's behaviour, I partly agree with this notion but believe that several other factors contribute significantly to shaping children's behaviour. Television undeniably exerts some influence over children's behaviour. The visual and auditory content they consume can shape their perceptions, attitudes, and actions. For instance, studies have linked exposure to aggressive or violent programming with an increase in aggressive behaviour among children. Similarly, advertisements targeting children might influence their preferences and desires, leading to materialistic behaviour. Therefore, the content children watch on TV can potentially mould their behaviour and preferences. However, the influence of television is just one part of a complex web of factors impacting children's behaviour. The family environment plays a crucial role. Parental guidance, discipline, and involvement significantly shape a child's development. For example, children raised in households where parents prioritize open communication and foster an environment of mutual respect often exhibit enhanced social skills and emotional intelligence, regardless of television exposure. Additionally, peer influence also plays a pivotal role, as children often model their behaviour on that of their friends and classmates. Education systems and societal norms also contribute significantly. To illustrate, schools, teachers, and educational materials influence a child's behaviour, while societal norms and cultural values shape their understanding of acceptable conduct. In conclusion, while television does wield some influence over children's behaviour, it is only one facet of the multifaceted array of influences they encounter. Factors like family, peers, education, technology, and societal norms collectively contribute to shaping the behaviour and development of children.
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