投诉课程与介绍不符Course failed to match description
AI 估评 9 分查看四维评分详情
四个维度等权计分,均值 9,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。
任务完成度 TA9 / 9
期待、实际问题及解决建议充分明确,对雇主出资和学习成果的影响相关,语气适合认识的负责人而仍保持礼貌。
档位依据:所有要求完整恰当满足,符合9档。
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daily hands-on sessions with financial modelling
预期具体。
either arrange a supplementary practical workshop
提出补救实操安排。
改进建议
- 继续用课程承诺与实际体验的具体差距支撑投诉。
连贯与衔接 CC9 / 9
按课程承诺、实际安排、结果和补救方案组织,In practice形成明确对比,This回指稳定,推进紧凑。
档位依据:衔接自然且段落安排熟练,符合9档。
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In practice, four of the five days were lecture-based
明确对比承诺与现实。
This has left me without the modelling skills
自然说明后果。
改进建议
- 保持对比、后果、建议的清晰链条。
词汇资源 LR9 / 9
hands-on、double-booked、paid study leave和supplementary workshop具体自然,词汇精确且适合正式投诉。
档位依据:任务范围内灵活准确运用丰富词汇,符合9档。
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the computer room had been double-booked
准确说明安排冲突。
a week of paid study leave produced little practical benefit
准确表达工作层面的影响。
改进建议
- 维持具体教学活动及安排问题的用词。
语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9
强调结构、被动、过去完成时、关系和宾语从句灵活准确,标点和并列选择稳妥。
档位依据:充分结构范围与控制符合9档。
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it was on that basis that my employer agreed to fund my place
强调句准确。
because the computer room had been double-booked
过去完成被动与原因关系准确。
改进建议
- 保持复杂结构为投诉事实服务的写法。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
作文题目
原创练习题;非实考题
Prompt: You attended a training course that was not what you expected. Write to the course director, Ms Barnes, whom you have met. Explain what you expected, describe the problem, and suggest what should be done.
Dear Ms Barnes,
I am writing about the Advanced Spreadsheets course I attended at the centre from 1 to 5 September, which unfortunately did not match its published description.
When I enrolled, the course outline promised daily hands-on sessions with financial modelling, and it was on that basis that my employer agreed to fund my place.
In practice, four of the five days were lecture-based, and the single practical session was cut short because the computer room had been double-booked. Several participants raised this with the tutor at the time.
This has left me without the modelling skills I was sent to acquire, and I now have to explain to my manager why a week of paid study leave produced little practical benefit.
I would be grateful if you could either arrange a supplementary practical workshop for the participants affected, or refund part of the course fee. I would be happy to discuss this with you in person.
Yours sincerely,
Amara Silva
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