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年龄是否应限制就业Age should not be a barrier to people to work

Task 2 · 来源范文讨论双方并给出观点工作与经济279 词AI 估评 8 分
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任务回应 TR7 / 9

双方解释相关,个人倾向清楚;退休必然增加青年岗位和年轻人更创新的假设较宽,对能胜任者的限制理由不足。

档位依据:主要观点扩展达到7分;概括和支持精度限制8分。

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  • new positions open up for younger people

    岗位替代被直接视为普遍结果。

  • may not always be able to keep up with the physical or technological demands

    有限情境不足以解释所有岗位一律退休。

改进建议

  • 区分体力或安全敏感岗位与可持续胜任岗位,说明统一年龄为何仍合适。

连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9

双边段落和结论对应,实例位置适当,指代清楚;最终公平判断略简略。

档位依据:组织顺畅达到8分;综合层次未达9分。

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  • Additionally, for some individuals, work provides

    自然增补继续工作的个人价值。

  • Furthermore, older workers may not always

    由岗位机会转向安全,关系明确。

改进建议

  • 结尾回扣个人自由与公共机会的具体权衡。

词汇资源 LR8 / 9

mandatory retirement、age discrimination及tech-savvy等贴题,词汇范围广;economic balance稍泛。

档位依据:广泛流畅资源达到8分;持续精确性不足9分。

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  • a sense of identity and purpose

    自然表达工作心理价值。

  • protect the economic balance

    所指经济机制不够明确。

改进建议

  • 用具体岗位流动或劳动力规划替代economic balance。

语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9

主语从句、条件、关系、被动与非谓语准确灵活,标点稳定。

档位依据:广泛结构与全篇准确符合9分。

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  • Whether individuals should be permitted to work

    主语从句与被动准确。

  • which could compromise productivity and safety.

    关系从句清楚说明后果。

改进建议

  • 保持复杂主语及关系从句控制。

评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)

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Some people believe that people should be allowed to work only till a set retirement age. Others say that if people want to work, age should not be a barrier to them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Whether individuals should be permitted to work beyond a fixed retirement age is often debatable. While some believe that people should be free to continue working as long as they are willing and able, others argue that a set retirement age should be enforced. In my opinion, maintaining a mandatory retirement age is necessary to ensure fairness, efficiency, and opportunities for younger generations. Supporters of the idea that people should work beyond a fixed age often cite personal freedom and experience. They argue that many older adults remain physically and mentally capable of contributing productively to the workforce. Preventing them from doing so could be seen as age discrimination. For instance, experienced professionals such as teachers, consultants, or craftsmen often possess valuable skills that can still benefit society. Additionally, for some individuals, work provides a sense of identity and purpose, and forcing them into retirement could negatively affect their mental well-being. The proponents of a fixed retirement age argue that this practice ensures a balanced and sustainable job market. As older workers retire, new positions open up for younger people, reducing youth unemployment and allowing for fresh ideas and innovation to enter the workforce. For example, in countries like Japan, where retirement is strictly enforced, companies have been able to modernize by bringing in younger, tech-savvy employees. Furthermore, older workers may not always be able to keep up with the physical or technological demands of certain jobs, which could compromise productivity and safety. In conclusion, while the desire to remain active beyond retirement age is understandable, I believe a fixed retirement age is essential to protect the economic balance, promote fairness, and ensure the continued evolution of the workforce.
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