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墨尔本社交中心活动变化Melbourne social centre activities 2000–2020

Task 1 · Academic数据时序变化概括文化与媒体254 词AI 估评 8.5 分
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四个维度等权计分,均值 8.25,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。

任务完成度 TA8 / 9

概述电影始终最高、乒乓和戏剧反向、音乐增加及武术稳定,后文有起终值和2010交点支持,关键特征覆盖充分。annually超出五年间隔观测的支持,其他近似值基本合理。

档位依据:主要趋势和比较准确充分达到8分;对年度变化频率的无依据扩展使准确性未达9分。

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  • the number of participants in martial arts fluctuated annually

    图仅提供每五年的观测,无法判定逐年波动。

  • becoming the second most popular activity with nearly 55 participants by 2020.

    准确指出乒乓球人数跃至第二,终值约54。

  • 题图证据

    图1显示电影持续第一、乒乓后期快速上升至第二、戏剧降至约6;戏剧与乒乓2010年同为20,音乐2005后增长。横轴仅五个五年间隔观测点。

改进建议

  • 将annually改为over the period,并保留2010交点及2020排名比较。

连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9

概述清楚分辨五条线,细节分组后持续使用former/latter和对比连接。末段涵盖三类活动稍密,但逻辑仍然清楚。

档位依据:有效分段与连贯对比达到8分;重复段首定位和指代稍多,未达9分的高度自然。

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  • Regarding the film club and musical performances, the former started

    清楚引出一组活动并建立指代。

  • Conversely, amateur dramatics

    明确切换到与乒乓相反的趋势。

改进建议

  • 可把相对稳定的电影和武术合组,将乒乓、戏剧、音乐的交叉变化放在另一组。

词汇资源 LR8 / 9

exhibited opposite trends、attracted、settled等变化表达多样,几乎没有拼写词形问题。participation numbers稍不如participant numbers简练,popularity多次使用但仍准确传达比较。

档位依据:范围广且表达流畅,符合8分;个别搭配及重复使精准自然度略低于9分。

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  • Table tennis and amateur dramatics exhibited opposite trends to one another

    准确表达反向走势。

  • compares the participation numbers

    意思清楚,participant numbers或numbers of participants更直接。

改进建议

  • 用participant numbers开篇,并交替用人数、排名和变化幅度表达数据。

语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9

复杂比较、非限定关系从句、分词和时间从句使用灵活,五条趋势的长句均保持明确的主语及正确时态。

档位依据:语法范围充分,句子结构及标点控制达到9分。

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  • Table tennis, which maintained around 20 participants until 2010, experienced the most rapid growth

    插入关系从句与主句结合准确。

  • stood at the same level as table tennis did in 2010.

    比较从句中的替代动词did准确。

改进建议

  • 保持比较句和插入从句的控制,并以更短句子减轻末段信息密度。

评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)

作文题目

公开教学题目;原图/考题来源与范文作者分开,具体考试日期未自行核实。

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selection and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS writing sample line graph activities Melbourn social center
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The line graph compares the participation numbers in five types of activities at a social center in Melbourne, Australia, from the year 2000 to 2020. The activities include film club, martial arts, amateur dramatics, table tennis, and musical performances. Overall, the film club consistently remained the most popular activity, showing minimal changes throughout the period. In contrast, musical performances began gaining participants later and rose in popularity continuously. Table tennis and amateur dramatics exhibited opposite trends to one another, with the former gaining popularity. Meanwhile, the number of participants in martial arts fluctuated annually but showed little change in general. Regarding the film club and musical performances, the former started with approximately 65 participants, experienced a slight decline to 60 over the next decade, and then returned to its initial level by 2020. The latter, on the other hand, had no participants until 2005, after which the numbers rose to just over 10 in five years and continued steadily to just under 20 by the end of the period. As for the other activities, martial arts consistently attracted between 30 and 40 members. Table tennis, which maintained around 20 participants until 2010, experienced the most rapid growth, becoming the second most popular activity with nearly 55 participants by 2020. Conversely, amateur dramatics, initially attracting just under 30 members until 2005, saw a continuous decline and stood at the same level as table tennis did in 2010. Over the subsequent years, it continued the trend and settled at about 5 participants by the final year.
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