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手机和互联网对社交的影响Mobile Phones, the Internet and Social Relationships

Task 2 · 来源范文利弊分析科技与科学293 词AI 估评 7.5 分
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任务回应 TR7 / 9

优缺点相关且有家人出行、移民和平台例子。为何跨距离收益超过面谈损失没有直接权衡。

档位依据:主要观点扩展达到7分;比较支撑不足8分。

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  • parents can easily keep in touch with their children who are on holiday

    具体说明联系优势。

  • Overall then, this is a positive development for society.

    结论概括积极,未进一步比较两方重要性。

改进建议

  • 说明远距离联系原本无法实现,而面谈损失可通过使用习惯缓解。

连贯与衔接 CC7 / 9

利弊分段可跟随;优势段包含家庭、移民、陌生人交流,末句过长,局部推进不够紧凑。

档位依据:总体清楚达到7分;段内组织不足8分。

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  • In addition to this, the internet means

    同段转入陌生人交流。

  • becoming friends and also discussing and exchanging knowledge.

    长句末再叠加活动,衔接稍繁。

改进建议

  • 把跨文化交流另成短段或拆成两句,减少长串连接。

词汇资源 LR7 / 9

词汇足以说明社交,keep in touch和loved ones自然;cell phones、internet、people反复出现,部分措辞笨重。

档位依据:一定变化达到7分;精确自然度不足8分。

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  • disconnected in relation to conversing with each other

    表述迂回。

  • keep in touch with their children

    日常搭配自然。

改进建议

  • 直接写less face-to-face contact,并用具体社交活动减少重复泛称。

语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9

关系、让步、原因及非谓语结构多样,绝大多数准确;多层并列和because嵌套略繁。

档位依据:广泛结构和多数无误符合8分;灵活紧凑性不足9分。

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  • all of which encourage messaging.

    非限制关系从句准确。

  • because through such things as Facebook, people connect

    原因从句内插入介词结构可理解但笨重。

改进建议

  • 拆分because引导的长句,分别表达跨国接触与知识交流。

评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)

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These days, cell (mobile) phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
It is rare these days to find someone who does not communicate and interact with others through a cell phone or the internet as they are widespread throughout society. I believe that the benefits of this development outweigh the drawbacks. One main negative consequence of this development is that people may have become disconnected in relation to conversing with each other face-to-face. People now tend to use their cell phones or the internet to communicate, but rather than actually speaking, they send a message. Some of the most popular applications are WhatsApp, Facebook Messenger, and Line, all of which encourage messaging. The result of this is that people may lack the benefits of engaging with others in conversation and the closeness this brings. Despite this, there are several important advantages as well. Firstly, the internet and cell phones mean that people can stay connected however far away they are from each other. For instance, these days, many people live in different countries or go travelling in different countries. Cell phones and the internet mean that parents can easily keep in touch with their children who are on holiday and people who immigrate to live abroad can easily communicate with their loved ones when needed. In addition to this, the internet means that people also interact with strangers and increase their knowledge of other cultures because through such things as Facebook, people connect to all sorts of people around the world, becoming friends and also discussing and exchanging knowledge. In conclusion, although a disadvantage of the internet and cell phones is the lack of face-to-face conversation, they have improved the way we can stay in contact with loved ones and exchange ideas with new people. Overall then, this is a positive development for society.
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