招聘时询问私人信息Asking Job Applicants for Personal Information
AI 估评 8 分查看四维评分详情
四个维度等权计分,均值 8,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。
任务回应 TR8 / 9
双边讨论充分且有具体招聘情境,个人观点以岗位相关性为界。婚姻状态是否可预测差旅能力的假设未充分辨析,条件立场还可更明确。
档位依据:主要问题充分回应达到8分;少量推断和立场细节不足以达到9分。
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if an employer is looking for a team player, they might be interested in knowing if an applicant is involved in sports or other group activities.
具体说明兴趣信息可能提供的工作关联。
as a single person may be more willing and able to take on such demands than someone with a family.
相关性论点依赖对婚姻状态的概括,个人判断未直接解决这一风险。
改进建议
- 明确可直接询问出差意愿,解释何时不应以婚姻资料替代岗位能力判断。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
五段按双方、意见、总结推进,论证易跟随,例证关系明确。个人观点与结论重复较多,衔接略显显式。
档位依据:良好组织和清楚衔接达到8分;冗余收束使9分的简洁自然不足。
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On the other hand, those who oppose employers asking for personal information argue that it can lead to discrimination and bias.
清楚切换观点。
By focusing on job-relevant information and avoiding discriminatory practices
结尾重复前一段的同一判断,新增总结有限。
改进建议
- 压缩最后两段重复的相关性和公平表述,用一句清楚的判断标准收束。
词汇资源 LR7 / 9
招聘与歧视词汇基本准确,有caregiving responsibilities等较具体表达;personal information、discrimination and bias及fair and objective多次重复,词汇变化有限。
档位依据:足够灵活和精确达到7分;重复影响8分要求的广泛流畅运用。
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discrimination against individuals who have caregiving responsibilities.
用词精确表达有照顾义务的申请人。
a fair and objective hiring process that benefits both applicants and the company.
表达准确,但fair and objective与前段重复。
改进建议
- 在说明具体风险时直接指出不公平排除或错误推断,减少反复使用discrimination and bias。
语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9
条件、让步、关系与名词性从句广泛准确,长句控制充分,时态、代词及并列形式稳定。
档位依据:全篇结构灵活且语法标点准确,符合9分。
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Similarly, an employer might make judgments about an applicant’s availability or commitment based on their marital status or parental status, which could lead to discrimination
非谓语修饰、关系从句及情态形式准确。
information that is directly related to the job requirements and that can help them make a fair and objective decision
平行关系从句控制清楚。
改进建议
- 保留复杂结构的准确性,压缩重复句时保持关系从句先行词明确。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
作文题目
来源题目;实际考试出处未核实
Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In today’s competitive job market, employers often ask job applicants for personal information, including their hobbies, interests, and marital status. While some argue that this information is relevant and useful, others contend that it is unnecessary and even discriminatory. In this essay, I will discuss both views and offer my own opinion.
On the one hand, those in favor of employers asking for personal information argue that it can help employers get a better sense of an applicant’s personality, interests, and values. For example, if an employer is looking for a team player, they might be interested in knowing if an applicant is involved in sports or other group activities. Similarly, an applicant’s marital status could be relevant if the job involves significant travel or relocation, as a single person may be more willing and able to take on such demands than someone with a family.
On the other hand, those who oppose employers asking for personal information argue that it can lead to discrimination and bias. For example, an employer might make assumptions about an applicant’s suitability for the job based on their gender, race, or sexual orientation. Similarly, an employer might make judgments about an applicant’s availability or commitment based on their marital status or parental status, which could lead to discrimination against individuals who have caregiving responsibilities.
In my opinion, while some personal information may be relevant to a job, employers should exercise caution in asking for it. In particular, employers should avoid asking for information that could lead to discrimination or bias, such as an applicant’s age, gender, race, or sexual orientation. Instead, employers should focus on asking for information that is directly related to the job requirements and that can help them make a fair and objective decision about the applicant’s suitability for the role.
In conclusion, while there are arguments for and against employers asking for personal information from job applicants, it is important for employers to be mindful of the potential for discrimination and bias. By focusing on job-relevant information and avoiding discriminatory practices, employers can create a fair and objective hiring process that benefits both applicants and the company.
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