三文鱼的生命周期Life cycle of a fish called the salmon
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概述、三组体长、卵期和海中五年基本正确;但把图示下游急流约四年这一关键阶段改为河口、盐水适应和河口成熟,另加摄食与能量储备等图外说明。
档位依据:仍有较多相关而准确的信息,高于4档;重要阶段被错误替换,符合5档关键区域失准,未达6档主要特征充分准确。
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three major stages of development in distinct aquatic environments, namely: river, estuary, and open ocean
引言即把不存在的河口列为主要环境。
As the fry grow into smolt, typically reaching a size of 12 to 15 centimetres, they move into the estuary. This transitional environment allows them to adapt to saltwater conditions.
体长正确,但地点和适应过程均非图示,且省略下游四年。
They remain in this habitat for approximately 5 years
海中五年与图一致,说明并非全部阶段误读。
- 题图证据
图标明lower river(fast flowing)约4年、open sea约5年,fry 3—8cm、smolt 12—15cm、adult salmon 70—76cm;无estuary。
改进建议
- 按图写下游急流约四年,删去河口及未标出的生理过程。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
概述先给循环,再沿生长与迁移顺序叙述,结尾返回产卵起点;长末段信息密集但文本内部仍易跟随。
档位依据:段落顺序和指代管理达到8档;末段场景过密使9档的娴熟段落管理不足。
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Overall, salmon progress from eggs laid in slow-moving upper-river streams to mature adults living in the ocean before eventually returning to their place of origin to reproduce
开头概述建立完整循环框架。
At this stage, they gradually migrate downstream
阶段和指代承接清楚。
Eventually, the mature adults swim back upstream to the calm freshwater environment where they originally hatched
末尾回扣起点,文本闭环清楚。
改进建议
- 把下游成长与海中成熟分段,减轻末段密度。
词汇资源 LR8 / 9
upper reaches、deposited、migrate downstream等词组自然精确,迁移和生长词汇宽;estuary所引入的是图表事实错误,词本身并非语法或词形错误。
档位依据:宽广而灵活的词汇使用达到8档;个别语境词过度扩展图示,尚未达到9档全程精确。
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eggs are deposited among small stones and reeds
准确自然地说明卵的位置。
they gradually migrate downstream, where the current is fast-flowing
迁移方向和水流特征表达具体。
feeding and developing the energy reserves needed for their return journey
搭配流畅,但承载图外情节。
改进建议
- 优先使用图示水域名称,减少图外解释性词组。
语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9
关系从句、时间状语、分词补充及复杂句控制稳定,绝大多数句子无语法错误;namely后的冒号稍显多余。
档位依据:多种结构灵活准确、标点总体受控,达到8档;局部标点与冗长句不支持9档。
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After roughly five to six months, the eggs hatch into fry, which are small fish of approximately 3 to 8 centimetres in length.
时间状语和非限定关系从句准确。
namely: river, estuary, and open ocean
namely后冒号冗余,是局部标点不自然。
completing the cycle by laying eggs and restarting the process
分词补充与并列动名词正确。
改进建议
- 删去namely后的冒号,并适当拆分末段长句。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
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