向朋友介绍新居城市Describing a new city to a friend
AI 估评 8.5 分查看四维评分详情
四个维度等权计分,均值 8.25,按半分档展示。AI 估评供学习参考。
任务完成度 TA9 / 9
工作职责、城市生活及来访邀请均充分具体,艺术和划艇建议照顾朋友兴趣,住宿和月份使邀请切实,亲切语气一致。
档位依据:全部要求充分满足,符合9档。
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I currently oversee two major projects.
职责与工作量明确。
July and August would be a perfect time to go kayaking along the fjords.
邀请含具体时间活动。
改进建议
- 保持按朋友兴趣安排来访的具体性。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
工作、城市、邀请分段清楚,转入住宿和活动自然;结尾重复询问近况,kayaking连续重复稍显累赘。
档位依据:易读且衔接良好,符合8档;9档可减少重复。
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There is also a bustling art scene that I think you would enjoy!
将城市特点联系收信人。
Please keep in touch and let me know how you are doing these days.
与开头问候重复。
改进建议
- 精简结尾近况询问,避免相邻句重复kayaking。
词汇资源 LR8 / 9
promising、oversee、mountain range、bustling art scene和fjords具体自然,词汇变化较好;少量动词和城市名重复。
档位依据:资源广泛灵活达到8档;9档还可更精练。
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A small but promising company
准确表达公司前景。
a bustling art scene
自然描述文化生活。
改进建议
- 适当用指代减少Vancouver和kayaking的连续重复。
语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9
关系从句、宾语从句、时间和目的结构准确,时态合理;连续多个I开头的陈述句使句法变化略有限。
档位依据:准确复杂结构符合8档;9档全面灵活性尚未完全展示。
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now that I am settled
时间原因关系准确。
I set up my study so that I can host a guest.
目的从句清楚。
改进建议
- 适度合并相关陈述,让句式变化与信息关系相配。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
作文题目
Magoosh 教学练习题;未证明为正式考试题
You just moved to a new city for work. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter,
Tell your friend about your work.
Describe your new city.
Invite your friend to visit you.
Dear Juliette,
How are you doing these days? I wanted to update you on my life here in Vancouver now that I am settled.
I moved to Vancouver for work last month. A small but promising company working on artificial intelligence offered me a position as a project manager. My work consists of making sure that the different engineering teams are working towards the same goal. I currently oversee two major projects.
Vancouver is a stunning city. I get to see the sun rise over a beautiful mountain range and gently set on the ocean. The mild climate allows me to commute to work on my bicycle. There is also a bustling art scene that I think you would enjoy!
I would love to see you and take you around Vancouver sometime. I set up my study so that I can host a guest. You mentioned that you would like to go kayaking. July and August would be a perfect time to go kayaking along the fjords.
Let me know when you would like to visit! Please keep in touch and let me know how you are doing these days. I can’t wait to see you again!
Best,
Fujiko Kine
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