家庭关系疏远的原因与影响Why Family Bonds Are Weakening
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任务回应 TR7 / 9
原因与利弊均回应,工作时间机制清楚。文化价值和心理健康联系较概括,自主收益仅简短说明。
档位依据:主要观点扩展达到7分;支持精度不足8分。
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both parents work, so they simply do not have as much time
明确因果。
this may well be a factor in this.
对心理健康的支持没有具体展开。
改进建议
- 说明家庭支持缺失在何种压力情境影响心理健康,并直接比较自主收益。
连贯与衔接 CC7 / 9
原因和评价分段明确,整体可跟随;两次this使心理健康句回指不清,评价段内容较密。
档位依据:总体清楚达到7分;指代精度未达8分。
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However, I believe that there are far more negative outcomes.
清楚切换权衡。
this may well be a factor in this.
前后this均概括较大,所指不够明确。
改进建议
- 用reduced family support和rising mental health problems替代双重this。
词汇资源 LR7 / 9
aspirations、emotional security等贴题;life、people及close重复,comfortable life相关概括较泛。
档位依据:足够灵活达到7分;精确变化不足8分。
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free to pursue their own dreams and aspirations
自然表达自主性。
a fulfilled and happy life
意思清楚但较泛。
改进建议
- 用具体情感支持与独立选择场景减少life的泛称。
语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9
条件、关系、比较和被动结构多样,多数准确;句型变化和复杂修饰控制尚未充分顶档。
档位依据:范围准确度达到8分;未显示9分充分灵活控制。
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If people are not so close with their family
条件句准确。
less value being placed on family relationships.
动名词被动结构准确。
改进建议
- 把较长原因句拆出一个主句,突出工作时间与交往机会的关系。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
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Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?
There has been a trend over recent decades for families to become less close than they were in the past and this situation is largely accepted in society. This essay will discuss the reasons for this and examine the benefits and drawbacks of this development.
One of the first reasons for a decline in the closeness of families is connected to the busy lifestyles that we now lead. Most people are having to work longer hours and often both parents work, so they simply do not have as much time to spend with each other as they did in the past. Another factor is the materialistic and consumer driven culture we now live in, which has led to less value being placed on family relationships. Modern technology also means that people are more interested in their online life than interacting with their family in their free time.
It could be argued that this has benefits. If people are not so close with their family, they are free to pursue their own dreams and aspirations, and to focus on improving their own lifestyle. However, I believe that there are far more negative outcomes. The most important factors leading to a fulfilled and happy life are emotional security and comfort. Without these we are in danger of feeling lost. It is a difficult world we live in and we need the support of people close to us to cope with modern life. We are seeing a rise in mental health problems in many countries and this may well be a factor in this.
To conclude, busy modern lifestyles, changing cultural values and modern technology are causing families to become less close. We should try to halt this trend as it has more negative than positive outcomes.
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