中学在校人数变化Secondary school attendance 2000–2009
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任务完成度 TA8 / 9
概述清楚指出社区学校增长、其余三类下降，正文用起终水平、减半和小幅变化有效区分四类走势；well over half与just under one quarter是合理近似，数据支持整体充分。未列2005或所有精确终值不构成档位限制。
档位依据：四类主要方向及变化幅度均被恰当地选择、突出和说明，满足8分；领先类别转换尚主要由分散的起终数据体现，直接综合比较可使内容更充分精炼。
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dropped by half in the same period.
准确说明文法学校由24%降至12%，既有起点近似也有变化幅度。
this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.
与社区学校12%升至58%一致，合理近似足以支撑显著上升与末期占多数。
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再次实际查看图1：社区12→32→58，志愿管理52→38→20，文法24→19→12，专门12→11→10；正文准确突出唯一上升项及其余降幅差异，中间年份不存在改变总体趋势的反转。
改进建议
- 可把志愿管理学校与社区学校的领先地位转换写成一句直接比较；精确终值可选用来加强比较，不必罗列所有年份。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
引言含概述，下降学校集中说明，社区学校单列对照，逻辑顺畅。转折稍显式但有效。
档位依据：组织和衔接良好达到8分；自然紧凑度未达9分。
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Similarly, the relative number of children
连接两类下降趋势。
However, while the other three types of school
清楚切换唯一上升类别。
改进建议
- 用类别之间的排名变化进一步整合比较。
词汇资源 LR8 / 9
marked increase、one fifth与small minority自然，范围适合任务。declined in importance把入学占比扩为重要性，略不精确。
档位依据：灵活广泛达到8分；局部词义偏移限制9分。
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a marked increase in the proportion
趋势用词准确。
declined in importance
数据只说明占比下降，不能直接等同重要性。
改进建议
- 将importance改为share of pupils或enrolment proportion。
语法范围与准确性 GRA9 / 9
对比、让步、关系和被动结构准确灵活，数字插入与标点稳定。
档位依据：任务范围内广泛结构及充分控制符合9分。
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whereas the community schools experienced
对比从句准确。
although not significantly.
省略让步结构自然准确。
改进建议
- 保持百分比比较及从句的现有控制。
评分日期：2026-10-23 · 评分规则：IELTS 写作公开评分标准（2023 年 5 月版）
作文题目
公开教学样题；未核实考试日期。
The table shows the Proportions of Pupils Attending Four Secondary School Types Between Between 2000 and 2009.
| 2000 | 2005 | 2009
Specialist Schools | 12% | 11% | 10%
Grammar Schools | 24% | 19% | 12%
Voluntary-controlled Schools | 52% | 38% | 20%
Community Schools | 12% | 32% | 58%
The table illustrates the percentage of school children attending four different types of secondary school from 2000 to 2009. It is evident that whereas the community schools experienced a marked increase in the proportion of those attending their institutions over the period, the others saw a corresponding decline.
To begin, the percentage of pupils in voluntary-controlled schools fell from just over half to only 20% or one fifth from 2000 to 2009. Similarly, the relative number of children in grammar schools - just under one quarter - dropped by half in the same period. As for the specialist schools, the relatively small percentage of pupils attending this type of school (12%) also fell, although not significantly.
However, while the other three types of school declined in importance, the opposite was true in the case of community schools. In fact, whereas only a small minority of 12% were educated in these schools in 2000, this figure increased to well over half of all pupils during the following nine years.
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