是否禁止在公共场所吸烟Ban Smoking in Public Places
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任务回应 TR7 / 9
立场明确,双方理由相关,健康优先标准清楚;提出吸烟区却未说明如何与公共场所禁令兼容。
档位依据:有扩展支持达到7分;方案条件与论证一致性不足8分。
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It is simply not fair to impose this upon another person.
明确以他人权利支持禁令。
allowing smoking areas.
未限定隔离或室外区域,与全面禁令可能冲突。
改进建议
- 说明吸烟区须与公共室内空间隔离,或删除未解释的例外。
连贯与衔接 CC8 / 9
反方、作者反驳和结论顺序清楚,代词可追踪;连接较显式但有效。
档位依据:良好衔接达到8分;尚非9分无感流畅。
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However, there are more convincing arguments
清楚转向作者理由。
In any case, pubs and restaurants could adapt
把商业顾虑与解决思路连接。
改进建议
- 让结尾准确呼应健康与例外范围,而不只重复禁令。
词汇资源 LR7 / 9
passive smokers、carcinogenic等较具体;tobacco consists of和health not only smoker表达不够精确,部分用词较泛。
档位依据:足够灵活达到7分;精确自然控制不足8分。
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tobacco consists of carcinogenic compounds
contains更准确,consists of暗示全部由这些组成。
drive many bars and pubs out of business
商业影响搭配自然。
改进建议
- 将成分表述改为contains,并明确受影响的是吸烟者与旁人的健康。
语法范围与准确性 GRA8 / 9
条件、关系、被动和名词性从句多样,大多数准确;not only补充结构的比较对象不齐。
档位依据:范围与多数无误达到8分;局部结构控制不足9分。
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If they would prefer not to smoke passively
条件句及情态表达准确。
cause serious harm to a person’s health, not only the smoker.
health与smoker不平行,应比较两类人的健康。
改进建议
- 改为危害both smokers and those nearby的健康,保持并列对象一致。
评分日期:2026-10-23 · 评分规则:IELTS 写作公开评分标准(2023 年 5 月版)
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Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Medical studies have shown that smoking not only leads to health problems for the smoker, but also for people close by. As a result of this, many believe that smoking should not be allowed in public places. Although there are arguments on both sides, I strongly agree that a ban is the most appropriate course of action.
Opponents of such a ban argue against it for several reasons. Firstly, they say that passive smokers make the choice to breathe in other people’s smoke by going to places where it is allowed. If they would prefer not to smoke passively, then they do not need to visit places where smoking is permitted. In addition, they believe a ban would possibly drive many bars and pubs out of business as smokers would not go there anymore. They also argue it is a matter of freedom of choice. Smoking is not against the law, so individuals should have the freedom to smoke where they wish.
However, there are more convincing arguments in favour of a ban. First and foremost, it has been proven that tobacco consists of carcinogenic compounds which cause serious harm to a person’s health, not only the smoker. Anyone around them can develop cancers of the lungs, mouth and throat, and other sites in the body. It is simply not fair to impose this upon another person. It is also the case that people’s health is more important than businesses. In any case, pubs and restaurants could adapt to a ban by, for example, allowing smoking areas.
In conclusion, it is clear that it should be made illegal to smoke in public places. This would improve the health of thousands of people, and that is most definitely a positive development.
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